Time seemed to be standing still
Frost covered the top of the submarine like icing on a cake.
Something strange had been brewing under the water for days.
Something terrible. Something powerful.
With an almighty roar, like a helicopter taking off,
the sea all around the vessel began to rise up.
Up and up and up it rose, forming menacing walls of darkness all around him.
The Captain felt powerless.
His fate, and the fate of his crew, lay in the hands of the mighty ocean.
All he could do was watch. And wait.
As the ocean waves get tola and tola! his crew was scared they
were so scared because the waves came crashing! in the boat was
feeling with water the waves were so tole that one enormous wave
came crashing on the boat and the boat was rower
for life they were so sad and scared they didn't no what to do.
The boat broke in half or late they were found on sure they were toking
to the hospital they survived. They got to see their family again.
The end
Hi jaymalyn, my name is Keti. I really like your writing and the similes you added but maybe you could add more next time.
ReplyDeleteHi Jaymalyn,
ReplyDeleteOn your first sentence, you have forgotten a full stop. On your 12th sentence, you forgot a capital letter after the full stop
Hi Jaymalyn. My name is Joselin. I really like your blog post about the sea wall.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the big job that you have.
What was your favourite part of writing this blog post.